=>3500 Eiger: Yameen's Work 04.03.13

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Monday, 4 March 2013

3 Yameen's Work 04.03.13

                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                         

 

 Way home


As darkness transformed into light, Shane awoke with Whiskets carefully listening amongst the bird’s serene song. Thinking it was a beautiful day, Shane decided to take a stroll in the busy city with his one and only friend BestCat.

Shane was famished. Looking for the girl he saw yesterday, Shane became distracted staring at the green Jag they set out today. Vroom, vroom the engine roared but while this happened Madcat ran away.
 
Not giving up faith, Shane was still determined to find the only thing that mattered to him in the world. Shane handing out leaflets of his cat but he heard something “meow” a cat screeched painfully.

Running around like a madman Shane tried to follow the sound from place to place. Not knowing the gang was there Shane turned into a dark alleyway. “Hello Shane”.
 
This time there were only two gang members there, Raul and Menéndez. Raul was holding Catlegs as well as disgorging oil no him whilst Menendez grabbed Shane and told him to call his otherwise his cat will be flamed. Shane did what they told him to do but they still got out a match and a gun. Shane’s dad answered “hello”.

3 comments:

  1. yameen you used many different wow words but whn I read it I'm not sure it made sence can you read over it and make sure it makes sence

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  2. I like your opening statement you should improveon your closing stament

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  3. You have used prepostional openers and good adjectives but to improve you could use drop in clause and some of your work is in the wrong tense.

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