A Short Story
Like
any other ordinary day in California, feathers drifting around the fresh air,
the shrieking rooster sings in a high pitch disturbing the previously calm
landscape. It was dawn and the boy called Shane woke up to the sipping of his blissful
kitten, soothing his parched throat. “Hey, Skinny Minny, save some for later!”
giggle Shane still lying on his stained ‘so called’ mattress. “Come on Kitty
Cat, let’s get some fresh air!” Shane announced scratching his irritated skin.
Shane,
clutching his beloved cat, strolling under the stifling sun spotted his
favourite Jaguar. “Eh, me ‘n’ you in a vroom vroom jag,” yelled the boy. The
city was getting extremely scorching and stuffy so the pair began to make the
home.
In and
out, dodging the barbed wires, Shane and the no name cat spot a mysterious
shadow. The purring of the kitten echoes the small and derelict den. The
outline is a young boy who looks around the same age as Shane. Clasping a
bronze emerald-eyed kitten the boy also freezes. “Hello, what are you doing
here?” they both chanted. Both of the kittens meow and clench each other’s dry
paws strolling out of the wrecked den. Still in shock, the lads both drenched
and dirty, constantly eyed each other and forgetting the cats. Both of them suddenly
grin which becomes a chuckle and then a deafening laugh. “So what’s your name?”
they say in unison. “Shane,” “Eddie,” they giggle. “I live here,” Shane
explains. “So do I!” Eddie says. Shane and Eddie talk and talk until Eddie
gasps, “Where’s my Whiskettes?” Shane repeats, “Where’s my Spitfire?” “NOOOO!”
they roar.
Gunshots
fire in the eerie air as the two kittens say their last meows…
THE
END.
Well Done Hana! You used lots of drop in clauses such as: In and out,dodging the barbed wires,Shane and the no name cat spot a mysterious shadow.
ReplyDeleteYou could have used other names for the cat, not only the cat with no name.
i think its really discriptive with good words like blissful,deafnining and mystrious shadow.
ReplyDeleteYou can improve on using diffrent names for the cat with no name.