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Monday, 4 March 2013

7 Lavanan's Work 04.03.13


 Mystery Murder Of Duncan

 

Blood dripping from his chest, our beloved King Duncan was savagely murdered during his sleep, unaware of what horrific event was to happen to his innocent corpse. Citizens of Scotland shivered in despair, who committed such atrocity? What was the motivation of this horrendous crime?

 

Our noble king slaughtered, suffocating in his own blood, penetrated by a crystal blade. Lady Macbeth commentated, “I have seen the two suns of our gracious king escape today, this leads me to suggest that the people who committed this devious crime were in fact Malcom and Donalbain!”

  

This country is taking drastic action by sending search parties in pursuit of these betrayful sons. A regular servant reported that he was awake during the time of the murder, doing his daily chores. He heard whispers most likely from two people, am and a women! He also added that the voices sounded like people from inside the palace, a traitor…

 

So the culprit still hasn’t been discovered but there are suggestions to who might have done it. The criminal for this devastating event will be severely punished. Will the truth be revealed? All this these questions still haven’t been answered but the main, important question, who committed this devious

crime has been partially answered.     
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7 comments:

  1. najmo4 March 2013 at 16:37

    you spelt sons wrong

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  2. anisah4 March 2013 at 18:25

    I think this is some excellent work, you used powerful vocabulary and correct punctuation but I think you should look at your spellings

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  3. Snowdon5 March 2013 at 10:31

    This is an excellent piece of writing. Well done!

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  4. Usman5 March 2013 at 10:48

    Lavanan, this is a very high leveled work for me. Well done!

    *You have used powerful vocabulary.
    *Correct structure and good use of complex sentences
    with correct punctuation.

    *I wish you had put one or two more questions to make it
    more effective.

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  5. Taner6 March 2013 at 10:48

    This was a great piece of work but as najmo said you spelt sons wrong

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  6. mahek6 March 2013 at 10:50

    you used very good vocabulary and you included all the features.

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  7. salman6 March 2013 at 11:02

    it think this is a fantastic piece of work you had the correct puctuion and you have added good vocabulary but you need to look at you spelling

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