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Showing posts with label Aleena's Work. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Aleena's Work. Show all posts

Monday, 18 March 2013

1 Aleena's Work 18.03.13


The Mangee

 

As the sweltering drops of blood splashed at my face, I quivered. The blades of a knives blade made me feel apprehensive. Above the ceiling laid cob webs all around me. Until, a big loud bang screeched at my face as if an alarming lion rawed at a ferocious tiger. I could smell his breath it was like a rotten egg poured with expired milk which was completely out of date. I was reluctant to see him.

 

There it was. Its body...

Monday, 11 March 2013

0 Aleena's Work 11.03.13


The Monster

 

Its eyes was full of slime. Its face was covered with buckets of blood. I saw every second of this dreadful moment. Above the table laid webs with vicious spiders crawling around me. The eerie tunnel has an unknown figure, which lays the monsters pitch black shadows. As the smoke hovered among the ceiling, I heard footsteps of the petrifying monster, it was like my heart beamed with fear. Every step the spooky giant is coming nearby, I could not take this for no longer. I saw the Monster. His breath was like a terrifying hurricane drifting its unpleasant smoke. The monster raised up his Arm toward my sight. Until I had a strange feeling that someone’s eyes fixated on me. My legs were like jelly, trying to walk but still nothing happened. Trying to turn around, I couldn’t move. I froze with fear. Suddenly, he screamed at me as if I was an erupting volcano. Its mouth showing a petrifying sight. I was trying to run but still nothing happened!            BOOM! BOOM! BOOM!                    

 

Nothing happened…

Monday, 4 March 2013

1 Aleena's Writing 04.03.13



The ferocious eruption

 

Sleeping and snoring, the volcano is asleep, sun. He is sweltering and boiling. However, he looks like he is turning like a scorching hot blade do you think he will explode out burning hot fire?

 

Oh no! The eerie volcano turned into a destructive inferno devouring everything in its path! Blazing with fire, the boiling lava whispered a boiling hot message. Raging with fear, the burning lave finally settled down again, trying to go lower and lower and lower. Relaxing and breathing, huffing and puffing him finally stopped and was never allowed to blow again!                   An hour later…

BOOM!!

Unfortunately he refused to listen and he started the eruption again! The volcano vomited loudly, he even burped out the rest of the lava which was left. Furthermore, the volcano felt scorching hot! Consistently exploding as much as he wanted to!

The fire and flames bursting out heavily,

He just can’t stop it as he is out of control!

When would this ferocious eruption stop???

 

Tuesday, 16 October 2012

8 Aleena's Work



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