=>3500 Eiger: Aleena's Writing 04.03.13

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Monday, 4 March 2013

1 Aleena's Writing 04.03.13



The ferocious eruption

 

Sleeping and snoring, the volcano is asleep, sun. He is sweltering and boiling. However, he looks like he is turning like a scorching hot blade do you think he will explode out burning hot fire?

 

Oh no! The eerie volcano turned into a destructive inferno devouring everything in its path! Blazing with fire, the boiling lava whispered a boiling hot message. Raging with fear, the burning lave finally settled down again, trying to go lower and lower and lower. Relaxing and breathing, huffing and puffing him finally stopped and was never allowed to blow again!                   An hour later…

BOOM!!

Unfortunately he refused to listen and he started the eruption again! The volcano vomited loudly, he even burped out the rest of the lava which was left. Furthermore, the volcano felt scorching hot! Consistently exploding as much as he wanted to!

The fire and flames bursting out heavily,

He just can’t stop it as he is out of control!

When would this ferocious eruption stop???

 

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