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Monday, 18 March 2013

2 Inaya's Work 18.03.13


THE GREEN BACKED SPIDER!!!!





As you are aware of this recent discovery, scientist Laura is awe of this unearthed creature which has been found. This miraculous and rear Green Backed Spider, has been here on earth from a Jurassic period of time.

 

What it looks like:

The Green Backed Spider has the ability to camouflage into the tree because of its green aluminium back. This ancient spider is impenetrable and very poisonous. It has long skinny legs with deathly spikes which can kill. If it spitted its poison into your eyes it will murder you in instants.

 

Where it lives: 

In addition, the Green Backed Spider lives in the deadly tropical Amazon rainforest between Brazil and Argentina. Its habitat is on the Tropicana tree which is 6m tall and 12m wide. The spider loves it there because of its emerald green, silky and luscious leaves.

 

Why Green backed spider are endangered:

Furthermore, the value of the spider is astronomical which is up to a thousand pounds. To salvage this spider the deforestation must STOP!

With the trees being cut off their food will decrease and they will have nowhere to live. If they don’t have anywhere to live then they might come into the roads and houses and distract people. Cutting off the trees will create a huge effect to our oxygen we breathe in. It’s on the brink of extinction.

 

What it eats:

Moreover, it mostly eats stuff of the Tropicana tree like red ants oil from the saps, fruits from the Tropicana tree and the fresh, luscious, juicy leaves from the tree.

 

In conclusion, why let them suffer this way and cut off their home? Since this discovery has been made a herd of organisation criminals have descended on to the Amazon. 

2 comments:

  1. it is very good but you could useb better openings

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  2. A sensational piece of work!
    * You used a variety of sentence openers
    * You used technical vocabulary
    W- You need to put your commas in the right place

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