=>3500 Eiger: Amna's Work 04.03.13

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Monday, 4 March 2013

3 Amna's Work 04.03.13


Charity choice:


 

The charity I think will be suitable will be for Water Aid! I think it is quite necessary for us to help the people of Africa. These poor people with no water, how will they survive? I’m here standing, but over there they won’t be.

20,000 people, not only in Africa but in other places die every minute, in fact every second. Surely you must agree that if you watch television then you’ve seen the charity, Water Aid! A recent survey from the same charity found out that 77%of people in Africa have no water. Bring some conscious to yourself and help if you care! Imagine you’re in their shoes. How would you feel to have no water? But think, when the children actually find some water they find out it’s dirty, they drink it. Why don’t you try to stop this, by doing your bit?


Don’t you think your contribution will make a difference, well I do!  I’m sure this will bring some attention to you. This is extremely fundamental don’t you think? Make the right choice!!! 

By Amna Bhatti

3 comments:

  1. Good use of rhetorical questions.

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  2. you have loads of sub headings and lots of formal language

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  3. it could have been better

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