=>3500 Eiger: Hazna's Work 04.03.13

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Monday, 4 March 2013

8 Hazna's Work 04.03.13


A poem of a volcano.
 
Sleeping calmly in the mist,

Chilling out full of warmth,

Slowly awaking in the dawn,

Losing its temper it tries to kill,

Spitting out chunks of lava,

Leaving the ground all hot and dry,

Burping out more and more,

Of the horrifying holtava!

Colossal and terribrut lava cover the ground,

Looking for its prey here and there,

Seeing nothing but smoky ash,

Going to explode full of menange,

It gets LOUDER,LOUDER,LOUDER and then,

 BOOM!WHOOSH!DOOM!

Molten lava destroy everything like a big sinister snake,

It achieves its prey and leaves the ground,

Infuriately it devours in,

Finally it has finished vomiting,

Nothing but left on the ground was scorching red lava as hot as summer,

The lavas a hot burning sun,
One of life’s biggest enemy’s, It tranquilly goes back to sleep, Snoring like a tired ba

8 comments:

  1. You described the the lava like scorching red and you used lots of similies

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  2. You have many brilliant words for example colosal and teribrut also descriptions on how it irups

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  3. Well done Hazna!You used a simile (Molten lava destroy everything like a big sinister snake) and a metaphor (Losing it's temper it tries to kill). Good work!

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  4. I like when you say Sleeping calmly in the mist,


    Chilling out full of warmth,


    Slowly awaking in the dawn,


    Losing its temper it tries to kill,


    Spitting out chunks of lava,becouse it carm then its angery.

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  5. Wow! A lot of vcop included and lots of adjectives!It sounds great!

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  6. i like this work because it describes loads of atmasfear.

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  7. excelent work hasna you used loads of vcop and adjectives it sopunded really good all together

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  8. i like how you had lots of temper and kiling

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