=>3500 Eiger: Priyen's Work 04.03.13

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Monday, 4 March 2013

3 Priyen's Work 04.03.13


 

 

CHARITY CHOICE
 

WWF
 

Dear fellow students,


I am here to in courage you to save these astonishing creatures the panda bear. This is based in Chinas’ rainforest.  In addition to the previous text I am telling that this is very fundamental otherwise these amazing animals will be wiped out and slowly become extinct. This is an investment for life pandas could still be here. Pandas are diminishing very quickly!

 

In 1999 there were (1,500) pandas but now you will think I’m fibbing but there are only (16pandas left). “Surely you must agree your contribution will make a great lifelong investment,” it can make a difference to their frightening life.


 

Will you help? “Statistics show that 80 % of the world’s pandas are gone”

PLEASE JUST PAY£2.00 A MONTH. You will receive a small adoption pack of the panda bear you will get a small picture of the panda that you have changed the life for.

 

“HELP NOW!” or say good bye please please help. Leave your foot print on its heart otherwise this creature will disappear. Give a little receive a lot.  

3 comments:

  1. This work very nice, I liked the Statistic and the brillant words.

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  2. Star- You have used good vocabulary like fundamental.
    Star- You have used different oppeners like "statistics show"
    Wish- You could use more persuasive words

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  3. Execellent work u said when it happened and the date

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