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Monday, 4 March 2013

3 Amber's Work 04.03.13


Charity Choice

 

Dear Fellow Students of South Park,

 

My name is Amber and I am here with you today to speak about the appalling situation that many parents face. When a baby is born before being in their mother’s womb for nine months they are premature. An extensive amount of babies are born premature and need to be put in incubators for a certain amount of time because they have not been developed properly

 

However hospitals do not have enough incubators for the wide amount of premature babies. Fortunately this amazing appeal has helped thousands of babies by donating a relevant amount of money. Fundamental and exceedingly crucial, our charity could help save thousands of little lives.

 

Surely you all agree that no child was born to die! Before this charity no doctors had hope of a child surviving but now with your help our Earth could be a better place. 1990 was a year of sadness but that hopefully will be reduced to 100% no premature babies dying. Would YOU let a child die just because of a tiny amount of money YOU did not pay? I do not think so!

 

You must choose this organisation! Undoubtedly this essential commitment will put a smile over all parents face’s and will do to yours. This matter is not fair and should not happen to anyone especially the young. We fought small pox, we fought swine flu and one day we will fight the suffering of many people, young and elder. Let us embrace this love. I have said my bit now it is down to you!!!

 

Thank you

 

 

3 comments:

  1. I like the way you describe the chairity avent you use very powerful words it is an exilant peice of writing

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  2. extremly persuasive

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  3. really persuasive

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