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Monday, 4 March 2013

4 Femi's Work 04.03.13


Green- Backed Spider

 

Introduction

Amid the chaos of today’s life, a phenomenal and miraculous discovery has just been put into the limelight. Have you ever heard of the Green-Backed Spider? According to W.W.F (Word Wildlife Federation) this dazzling was believed to be extinct since the Ice-Age but now it has been properly introduced into 21st century.

 

Appearance and Weight

Covered in indestructible hot molten metal, this Arachnid is also enlisted with aluminium spikes across it’s limbs. Also striking fear into it’s prey, with it’s red retro skin, black eyes and slimy green back. Using it’s body hair I can detect any body heat within a range of 10m.Weighing 2 tonnes he is the WEIGHT OF AN ELEPHANT!

 

Prey and hunting technique

Preying on fish, in the frosty Artic Circle, it melts ice and jabs the fish in the brain, stunning the fish instantly. Then it liquefies the fish with it’s acid urine.


Habitat

Roaming in the North Pole, the spider is a vagabond, sleeping anywhere in it’s handmade hammock, made by it spinning a impenetrable thread, which can hold 500 tonnes.

 

Closing

Sadly, the spider is an SEVERLY ENDANGERED SPECIES! With only fewer than 100 left. Due to the loss of ice and illegal hunting of it’s metal, this creature will be entirely extinct  by 2050. But with your support we can reduce our carbon footprint, stop the loss and tackle the illegal trade of it’s metal.

 

 

 

 

4 comments:

  1. Well done Femi. Well organised report! Lots of facts and detail. How can you make your closing more effective?

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  2. wonderful report but nex time add extra info

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  3. Fantastic peace of work-you had good vocabulary for eg:phenomanal,miraculous and dazzling.
    your discriptoin was also good for eg covered in indestructable hot moltan metal.However your closing wasn't as well structured and didn't flow as well as the beggining of your writting.

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