As
darkness transformed into light, Shane awoke with Whiskets carefully listening
amongst the bird’s serene song. Thinking it was a beautiful day, Shane decided
to take a stroll in the busy city with his one and only friend BestCat.
Shane
was famished. Looking for the girl he saw yesterday, Shane became distracted
staring at the green Jag they set out today. Vroom, vroom the engine roared but
while this happened Madcat ran away.
Not
giving up faith, Shane was still determined to find the only thing that
mattered to him in the world. Shane handing out leaflets of his cat but he
heard something “meow” a cat screeched painfully.
Running
around like a madman Shane tried to follow the sound from place to place. Not
knowing the gang was there Shane turned into a dark alleyway. “Hello Shane”.
This
time there were only two gang members there, Raul and Menéndez. Raul was
holding Catlegs as well as disgorging oil no him whilst Menendez grabbed Shane
and told him to call his otherwise his cat will be flamed. Shane did what they
told him to do but they still got out a match and a gun. Shane’s dad answered
“hello”.
yameen you used many different wow words but whn I read it I'm not sure it made sence can you read over it and make sure it makes sence
ReplyDeleteI like your opening statement you should improveon your closing stament
ReplyDeleteYou have used prepostional openers and good adjectives but to improve you could use drop in clause and some of your work is in the wrong tense.
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