=>3500 Eiger: Sumeyya's Work 11.03.13

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Monday 11 March 2013

1 Sumeyya's Work 11.03.13


Charity choice….

 

Dear fellow people,

I am here to inform you to do something significant for the world. Do you want to save an animal which is suffering and may be gone for ever?

 

The panda is in constant fear of being extinct! If you deprive its bamboos (food), it will be ravenous and die of hunger! A numerous number of pandas are diminishing in China. Already us humans made the dodo (a type of bird) Extinct! Do you want another specious of animals to leave us? 98% of pandas are dying every year and vital behaviour is done. Statistic show that this company has helped pandas since 2009. Is it necessary to cut down millions of bamboos, because generations later the, children of the future would not know what a panda looks like other than a picture.  We have the luxury to eat whatever we want and they don’t.

 

If you do this good deed, you will receive a cute cuddly panda toy and adoption pack. So please, use this life time opportunity wisely and vote for the company. Its only £1 a month. The pandas are decreasing in the world, mainly in China…

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1 comment:

  1. good perswasive languge and 2 good drop in clause but you can improve it with 2 or 1 more drop in clause

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