=>3500 Eiger: Isma's Work 11.03.13

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Monday 11 March 2013

1 Isma's Work 11.03.13


THE RAGING SEA!!

 

Destructively devouring onto the golden sand,

The waves are soaring,

 

Grinding everything like a crusher, the waves are horrifyingly bashing!

 

BANG, SPLASH,
 
 The Sea is crashing!!


 

Thrashing thunderously!

 

It’s a cheetah sprinting, destroying it can find on its path ferociously!

 

It’s a poisonous python spreading venom through the land!

 Now everything belongs in her hands!

 

Crashing, tumbling, its feeling angry as the waves rage in dread!

 

Houses, humans, they’re all dead!!

1 comment:

  1. I like the waybthat you used metaphors like thwe cheetah running ans the sea devouring the sand. you also used ly words. well done!

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