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Monday 4 March 2013

5 Sumeyya's Work 03.04.13


Gloomy Glamis…

 

 

 

Murder roams the Glamis Castle for a tragedy has happened! Last night, while the king was sleeping in his royal bed chambers, the murder was unleashed… This brutal incident remains as a mysterious death…

 

 

 Lady Macbeth confirmed that King Duncan’s two sons have something to do with this crime because they escaped from Scotland. Macbeth also claimed, “As I entered the kitchen I saw the king’s door open saw I entered and saw a blanket of blood. I saw two grooms drenched in blood so I killed them.”

 

The people of Scotland are now waiting for a new king. It is most  likely to be Macbeth, Thane of Cawdor…                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                      
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5 comments:

  1. Mustafa4 March 2013 at 11:06

    Star- You have used speeches (direct only)
    Star- You have used some vocabulary like brutal.
    Wish- You could improve on using indirect speech and more vocabulary.

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  2. Georgia4 March 2013 at 11:11

    I like the way you described tragidy it really goes well in your peice of writing i like the sentence blanket of blood its a really fantastic peice

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  3. Aleena11 March 2013 at 10:43

    You have powerful vocabluary

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  4. Georgia11 March 2013 at 10:46

    its an exelant peice of writing mainly because you consuntrated and that caused a creation of a marvoullese peice

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  5. Kirandeep11 March 2013 at 10:47

    I like the the direct speech and the elipsies. you created suspence

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