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Wednesday, 7 November 2012

6 SATs style writing activity 13.11.12

This is a SATs style activity. Please feel free to have a go. You can publish on the Blog or bring it in to me. Thanks.


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  1. Zara H7 November 2012 at 19:22

    Dear Mrs.Blake,
    I am sorry for arguing with Mr. Jones today. I am writing this letter to persuade you to forgive me and make you change your mind about not letting me attend the trip to Alton Towers.

    I had not had a good morning either. I was woken up at 5:00 AM by my annoying little brother jumping on me and my just as annoying little sister shouting in my ear. I ran a shower and when I got in I discovered that the water was freezing cold!!! To make matters worse, when I went downstairs to eat my breakfast I found out that we had no milk. Because of this I couldn't eat my favourite cereal, Coco pops. When I looked in the bread bin I discovered that we had no bread either. As a result, I couldn't make any toast and went to school hungry.

    Because of my hunger I was in a bad mood all day long. This made me angry and gave me a bad temper. As I was in a rush in the morning, I had forgotten my homework and Mr.Jones made me stay in at lunchtime as a punishment. All I was thinking about was eating lunch and yet I didn't

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    1. Mr Ahmed8 November 2012 at 16:41

      Well done Zara. Thank you for making the effort to write a great piece! Do you have a closing? Looking forward to reading other examples!

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  2. Zara H8 November 2012 at 18:57

    (Continuation from before…)
    …even get to eat it!!! This is the reason I lost my temper and shouted at Mr.Jones. Now that I have done it I really regret it and once again I hope you forgive me.

    I think you should let me come with you because I have never been to an amusement park before and I think this would be a good opportunity for me to have some fun with my friends. I have asked my parents if we could go on a family trip to Alton Towers many times before but they always said no. This is because don’t have enough money for two people let alone our whole family.

    I have done my best to try and persuade you to change your mind about not letting me attend the trip to Alton Towers. I just hope I have done enough…

    Yours sincerely,
    Zara Hussain

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  3. Zara H9 November 2012 at 17:57

    Mr Ahmed, do I have any mistakes?

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  4. Aleena24 November 2012 at 18:15

    Dear Miss Lucy,

    I think you are such a generous teacher,you make me happy every day;But i have to say something,something that makes me feel anxious and emotional.I have to say this anyway.Even though if you think i'm a good student i still have to say something about a matter that i will talk about.I hope you'll read my letter and i really hope you would realize how it feels.

    Unfortunately,there has been some issues between you and me.You are very kind,you are very nice but this is about what you think about my behavior problems.I really want to take part to go to Alton towers but you may think i am such a atrocious person. I'm honest if you think like that you would have have bad anger management which will be very bad.If you don't let me go i would wreck your whole room!And do you think i have the right to do that?Sometimes you shout at me do i answer you back?Now just because i had bad behavior doesn't mean to not take me to a magical theme park!

    Do you know why i had such atrocious behavior?Because when i woke up in the morning i didn't realize that all of my sweets were taken!I felt so angry then i felt mad for the whole day!How would you feel if all of your room was wrecked by someone?Well if you feel sad then that's what i thought!I am now so brave i have to tell you this part...

    I was drinking milk then suddenly a big bang came then all of my chocolates and sweets went on the ceiling!Then the bang was so loud that the sweets and chocolates literally went up to my chimney!There were goodies all over my chimney but then it snowed and all of my goodies were black and disgusting ughh!Thats why i was bad tempered for all of that day and i literally chucked my pens in the bin!So if you take me to a theme park i promise that i would...
    ....NEVER EVER

    ...Do it again.So what do you think?You are very kind so can you please send me to Alton towers?I like all the ride expecially star tours!


    From your student luckyisha

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  5. Aleena24 November 2012 at 18:16

    Do you like my letter Mr Ahmed?I took 40 minutes to do that letter!

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