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Monday, 4 March 2013

3 Amna's Work 04.03.13


Charity choice:


 

The charity I think will be suitable will be for Water Aid! I think it is quite necessary for us to help the people of Africa. These poor people with no water, how will they survive? I’m here standing, but over there they won’t be.

20,000 people, not only in Africa but in other places die every minute, in fact every second. Surely you must agree that if you watch television then you’ve seen the charity, Water Aid! A recent survey from the same charity found out that 77%of people in Africa have no water. Bring some conscious to yourself and help if you care! Imagine you’re in their shoes. How would you feel to have no water? But think, when the children actually find some water they find out it’s dirty, they drink it. Why don’t you try to stop this, by doing your bit?


Don’t you think your contribution will make a difference, well I do!  I’m sure this will bring some attention to you. This is extremely fundamental don’t you think? Make the right choice!!! 

By Amna Bhatti

3 Amber's Work 04.03.13


Charity Choice

 

Dear Fellow Students of South Park,

 

My name is Amber and I am here with you today to speak about the appalling situation that many parents face. When a baby is born before being in their mother’s womb for nine months they are premature. An extensive amount of babies are born premature and need to be put in incubators for a certain amount of time because they have not been developed properly

 

However hospitals do not have enough incubators for the wide amount of premature babies. Fortunately this amazing appeal has helped thousands of babies by donating a relevant amount of money. Fundamental and exceedingly crucial, our charity could help save thousands of little lives.

 

Surely you all agree that no child was born to die! Before this charity no doctors had hope of a child surviving but now with your help our Earth could be a better place. 1990 was a year of sadness but that hopefully will be reduced to 100% no premature babies dying. Would YOU let a child die just because of a tiny amount of money YOU did not pay? I do not think so!

 

You must choose this organisation! Undoubtedly this essential commitment will put a smile over all parents face’s and will do to yours. This matter is not fair and should not happen to anyone especially the young. We fought small pox, we fought swine flu and one day we will fight the suffering of many people, young and elder. Let us embrace this love. I have said my bit now it is down to you!!!

 

Thank you

 

 

1 Ali's Work 04.03.13




 

 

Dear diary,

 

I can’t believe what a disgraceful thing I’ve

done! I have murdered my own blood. King Duncan had been brutally killed by me, his own

Cousin. I am emotionally drained with regret.

I wish to die myself after committing such an
unforgivable sin. Why did I listen to the witches prophecy and lady Macbeth? Why?

 

When my dagger travelled into the king’s stomach my whole body froze with fright.

I am treated as a filthy old man by the people of

Scotland. Everyone wants me dead. Have I become that greedy to kill a member of my family just to be on the throne? I’m consumed

With guilt and fear, I find it difficult to sleep when I think about that treacherous moment when my cousin’s body was smeared all over with blood. I always get the feeling that I’m being haunted by my cousins ghost.  

 

 

 

 

1 Aleena's Writing 04.03.13



The ferocious eruption

 

Sleeping and snoring, the volcano is asleep, sun. He is sweltering and boiling. However, he looks like he is turning like a scorching hot blade do you think he will explode out burning hot fire?

 

Oh no! The eerie volcano turned into a destructive inferno devouring everything in its path! Blazing with fire, the boiling lava whispered a boiling hot message. Raging with fear, the burning lave finally settled down again, trying to go lower and lower and lower. Relaxing and breathing, huffing and puffing him finally stopped and was never allowed to blow again!                   An hour later…

BOOM!!

Unfortunately he refused to listen and he started the eruption again! The volcano vomited loudly, he even burped out the rest of the lava which was left. Furthermore, the volcano felt scorching hot! Consistently exploding as much as he wanted to!

The fire and flames bursting out heavily,

He just can’t stop it as he is out of control!

When would this ferocious eruption stop???