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6 Football
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Friday, 27 April 2012
6 Children's writing
Best
Meal
Mmmm… so mouth-watering, so lavish it teases your taste buds. Layers
after layers of heavenly, like the pyramid Giza, it would mesmerise your flimsy
eyes. Your tongue would be wrestling with sweetness from heaven. This lip suckling
meal can take on the most supreme and exquisite feasts on the entire planet, it
can have raisins, nuts and a variety of more. This flourishing meal is…
BAKLAVA!!!
Andi
Better Chocolate cake
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As the divine melting chocolate cascades down your mouth before
the mouth-watering sponge explodes. Dissolving in your mouth, a shiny layer of
scrumptious flakes mesmerises its victim and slowly raids your taste buds in a
heavenly dream!
Desire will take
over as soon as you consume this treat and it will leave you craving more.
Dylan
Blue Planet
Blue planet is a friendly solar system they have glistening creatures,
dazzling mansions, and best of all they have flying carpets.
On the petite planet they have unique creatures, they look generous and
courageous, and these creatures are named, Bluenerians. The blue planet species
look so different compared to humans, they have rough scaly skin, their faces
look repugnant and they have 92 teeth although they fall out but it takes three
years for the tooth to grow back.
Every single Bluenerian lives in a special green sea, it has particular
bacteria and trees for their oxygen also they have little pink food that they
nibble on. The creatures have one eye when their born but every two years they
grow another eye, Bluenerians have red razor sharp spikes for hair. They also
talk nonsense, they have their own language like humans. Humans can’t
understand them and they can’t understand humans.
Priya
What is this
scintillating dessert? Heavenly chocolate oozing out of the irresistible crumbling
sponge. With divine flakes, it will mesmerise you. Mouth-watering chocolate
lava will be creamy as it comes out of the
volcano. As soon as you locate it on your mouth, you will never stop eating it.
By Humaira
CHOCOLATE CAKE!
The luxurious chocolate cake was
starring intensely at the innocent victim, waiting to be eaten, eat me, eat me.
It was like a dream come true. It
was a once in a lifetime opportunity to demolish this scrumptious dessert. One
slice and the creamy chocolate came oozing out onto the plate! As you stare at
it more and more you crave it and make your mouth water. It’s like a
mesmerising dream that you’ll never forget in a million years. When you place
the biggest slice you can fit into your mouth the explosion erupts. The feeling
you get when stars start dancing, teasing your taste buds for more…It will be
devoured no matter what!
Milan
CIRCUS!
Do you like circuses? Do you know what happens behind the
scenes? Defenceless animals are being tortured by mankind, as they forced to
preform outrageous tricks. Statics reveal that 80% of the public do not agree
with animals in circuses which should be exploited entertainment. RSPCA are
apprehensive that if this is everlasting animals be extinct.
Most importantly, animals to cope with harsh training, in the
result of this they are being whipped to preform stunts. Evidence reveals
scarce quantity of sanitation and hygiene in a numerous circuses. Can you cope
with this grief? Pitiful animals are locked up in addition our agent reported
that the condition is, lacking poor.
Furthermore, friendly elephants are now pugnausis this is caused
by abuse for the animals, such as when in 2004 5 year old girl had her finger
bit off! Surely you must agree those circuses are very hazardous to the
audience and people acting in the circus. Moreover, these animals having to be
separated by their beloved family as well as in 2004 stated by MP animal
warfare “Circuses are in dire need of attention. Germany alone has 200
circuses!
Finally, circuses should be banned from using animals as
entertainment and their abuse. On the other hand they can perform human stunts
such as clowns, make your judgement on our website. Is the way forward for
entertainment with animals or mankind?
Website www.circuses.co.uk
Written by
Mathushan
Lindergaard
Ilnio Road
IG4 – 631
Dear Harriet
How could
you blame me? You are my loyal friend and you are accusing me of hurting my
dearest teacher. Once the sinister demon pushed Dumbledore of the colossal
building I felt like I was falling down with him, my emotions took over me.
Harriet, I
never thought this day would come, you know how much I care of Dumbledore so
why would I do such a thing? When the demon arrived I felt powerless. The
ruthless devil turned to me, my heart started pounding heavily, thankfully I
was wearing the cloak of invisibility. The demon was a heartless animal without
a soul, however all I saw was a dark figure.
You must
believe me, I need your support. With our power combined we can stop this
chaos from happening. Even though, no
one is on my side I feel that I have been broken to pieces. I hope this changes
your opinion about me , and I hope you reply back very soon.
Your
sincerely,
Hermen
P.S I heard the demon say “The dark lord will
return” what does this mean?
Safwan
The divine appearance is
mouth-watering. A shiny layer of thick caramel gushes out of the deluxe sponge,
as you devour the luscious cake. Flakes raid your mouth teasing your taste
buds. Is this your heavenly dream coming true by a group of angels? The
scintillating caramel trickles down falling down to your stomach making you
feel like you’re on a luxurious island.
By Harsh
Memories of the
School Year
Year six is
all nearly over and today is the start of the last week before we all get
separated. I would like to share some memorable moments of my time in this
class with all of you!!! Some memories and some weren’t as nice.
I have to
say that the most fun activity was going to PGL!!! I was a little bit nervous
as I had never experienced a trip where we had to stay over. Despite that, I
still found it very amazing. We did all sorts of activities but the zip wire
was most exciting!!! It went so fast that the wind was hitting me on the head.
I found it really fun because I was with all of my friends.
The biggest
challenge throughout my time in year six was SAT’S. It was a very tough challenge to do. Although
I couldn’t concentrate in some lessons, I still got very good results. It was
so much revision every day that it was too much and there was no concentration
going on the room. My parents had said that if I score high in the tests the n
I could get anything I wanted to get!!! I am so happy that I fulfilled my
parents’ wishes!!!
The best
thing the whole year was the days after SAT’S, all we did in class was play and
make things such as Aztecs masks. It was like another creativity week all over
again. We all made so many good things that we could take home and have it for
a memory of a lifetime.
However,
after all this hard work, year six was still the year that I loved most. I wish
that everybody fits in well in their new schools!!!
Tulsi
Memories of the school year!
In year 6 I have had an amazing time and I have lots of significant
memories in my page of the book. I am very sad to be leaving year 6 so I want
to make this special.
Out of many challenges this year, my hardest has to be SATS! It
wasn’t very easy to get a break during SATS but somehow I managed to get
through it. As a matter of fact the whole half of May has been a challenge!
Constant writing had to be done, but the tests weren’t that bad after all, and
as a result I got a very impressive mark .of course I was exhausted after it,
but it was worth it!
PGL was the most exiting activity, again it was in May and it was
the best thing ever. Even though I did get showered with rain (witch caused me
to get a cold) I want to go back there now. Rock climbing has to be best of
them all because I was the first to go to the top and ring the bell, have you
ever had so much fun before? (I felt so proud of myself after that)
So as you can see this year has been hectic I cannot believe that
this year could be so good at some times and bad at others. I still can’t wait
for secondary school even though I will still miss this one!
By Karishma
Memories of the school year
My school
year is something that I will never forget. I’ve had really boring days but
mostly fun and happy ones! Here are a few of those remarkable days.
PGL was the
best days of the whole school year! There were so many exciting sports we had
to do 6 in day! I was so sleepy I just fell on my cosy bed after all the
difficult but fun activities were over.
Without a
doubt my most embarrassing moment was when we were all talking by the dirty
green lake when my friend bumped into me, and I fell in with a huge SPLASH!
Everyone was laughing at me the rest of the day.
I think you
all know that I’m terrified of heights. When we all had to climb up that
colossal wall I felt like I was going to die! Luckily I lived!
That’s the
best moments of my school year that I will never forget!
Nandinee
My favourite meal
I walk through gold the door , I can
smell the beauty of wonderment
And I know it is going to be my
favourite meal. When I take my wonderful first bite the food blasts at my mouth like a explosion and around in my mouth . It looks like a e
pool of beauty with aubergine , the
taste is outstanding like a wonderful
pizza and is beautiful like a chocolate.
The food just sends explosives to invade my mouth and it explodes
As well. The meal is Aubergine and spinach curry.
Jay
Shop till you drop machine!
The shop
till you drop machine is amazing! Once
it has been bought you will have every single shop in the world will be in your
very own hands. The shop till you drop machine (posh shop) is a great way to spend
money. You can do all your shopping from any place in the world through one
tiny machine.
Firstly the
company’s name is future in your hands and is based in Westfield. The machine
is so fantastic that you don’t have to pay the original price and also you can
pay by debit/credit card cash it is entirely up to you. Once you have bought an
item you can select how much you would like to pay 10p, 20p, 50p or £1. In
addition the fabulous features of the posh shop are the colour section, the
shrinker, the return button and many more. First you have to select a shop then
an item. Secondly you must pick a colour you wish to have. If you are not
satisfied with your item simply press the return button.
Furthermore,
security is very important so there has been a finger length checker inserted
to make sure it is the real owner.
However, you
are only allowed to purchase 25 items a day because there is a terrible
transformation that turns your machine into an angry dwarf if you exceed the
purchase limit. So BEWARE! This machine will be sold for £50. It will be half
price for a week so buy it while you can!
By Haneefa
Trapped!
A trembling
Charlie, crept towards the haunted mansion. This was a dare from her friends,
so she had to fulfil it. Finally, when she reached the old, wooden door and
stretched her hand forward to grab the metal handle. Apparently, it turned out to
be open! Charlie stepped inside, the first room she was in was a huge room.
Dusty cobwebs were found in every corner,
beside her there were scattered glass pieces on the filthy floor.
Slowly, Charlie tiptoed onwards towards
the staircase to explore even more. When she had arrived at the top, there was
a whole selection of wooden doors with pictures of pharaohs on them. She picked
one and went inside. It was as messy as the room downstairs. Suddenly, she
heard the door slam shut. Charlie ran over to the door to try and open it
however it turned out to be locked! Charlie was trapped!
Charlie was
determined to call her friends to tell them about the emergency, however in
that haunted mansion there was absolutely no service. Struggling, to walk over
to the wooden floor, there were bits and bobs which were all over the floor,
Charlie finally reached the smashed window. As she looked out, a grey face
appeared in front of her. This startled Charlie so much. “Hello? Who are you?”
Charlie whispered quietly. She was not expecting an answer. However, the face
just stared at her and said. “I am here to help you.”
Charlie
could not believe, what she had just heard. “How can you help me? I came here
for a dare and I g-got t-t-trapped in
here!” Stuttered Charlie. Suddenly, the grey face grew arms and reached out to
pull Charlie. At that moment Charlie found herself next to her friends. She was
so relieved. The next thing she knew, she was telling her friends all about her
adventure and the grey face. Out of nowhere a cage appeared and trapped Charlie
once more! There was absolutely no way out! Would she get out?...
Afra
Trapped!
Struggling to climb up the cell there was no chance. She
was trapped.
Staring up at the beautiful sun shine Lucy was immensely
tempted to
To get out because it was her birthday. Despite trying to
get Lucy
Would never forget what happened to her on that terrible
night.
She was with her best friends but they went to get a drink.
At that moment, a seven feet tall man tiptoed forward and
pushed
Her in a long creepy and mysterious cell. An unforgettable
tear
Dropped from Lucy’s eyes but she cleared it off.
Cautiously, Lucy tried
To escape she failed but tried again but this time more
quietly. All of a
Sudden, a long hand extended down, Lucy was about to grab
it but she
Wasn’t happy about it. The chance was back a rope slid down
and
Lucy started climbing she didn’t have enough power but she
never
Gave up. When she was out she saw it was her best friend
Bobo.
They sprinted back to the castle she got ready and they
celebrated
Her birthday (Lucy and Bobo said “Phew!”
Laiba
Trapped!
CRASH!
My hand just slipped. There I was falling to my death. My life flashed right
before me. But then I remembered I had a grappling hook tied around me. I
clutched at it, I chucked it at the wall and it got stuck on a secure piece of
tree. I scrambled and climbed up the rope not knowing what was up there. I
layed flat and looking up at the gleaming moon. I stumbled up. I could not
believe my eyes. No not him I thought. Anyone but him. But he had something I
could not make out who or what it was but it was something. “Well, well, well
we meet again. “Spoke the cold malicious voice. “Give me back my son. “Then at
that moment I realised what the figure was.” We had a deal you give the money I
give you your son” said the voice. “Okay! Here take it.” I slowly slid the money towards him. “You
should never trust a man who has people with guns.” Grumbled the man. There was
a puff of smoke and they suddenly vanished. “Whoa!!!!!! I unexpectedly fell in
in a dark damp hole. “HELP! SOMEONE HELP!!! I screeched. I suddenly felt dizzy.
I collapsed right in that spot. I unhurriedly got back up It was now dark. My
hands were now my eyes. The only thing I could see was the bright gleam from
the moon. I jumped and jumped but it was no use. I could not reach I needed a
ladder or a rope. But then I remembered that I had a flare gun in my back
pocket. I pulled it out and shot it straight up and a bright light detonated
with colours. All I could do now was wait, I sat down I rolled myself in a
ball. “Hello anyone there hello” said an old Australian accent. “I am down
here.” I replied. “Hold on here grab onto this. Said the voice. I clutched on
and pulled myself up it was now morning.
Subhan
TRAPPED!!!
One cold stormy night, there was a poor boy called James. As he
stared at the glistening, shimmering moon while relaxing in his cosy bed he
heard a strange noise. Everyone was asleep except for James. Cautiously, James
walked down the steep stairs and saw a shadow of a bloodthirsty beast! James was shocked. He ran around the house
screaming ‘BEAST BEAST’! The vicious and furious monster grabbed James’s neck
tight with his scaly hand and quickly locked him in the storage. “It’s dark,” whispered
James to himself.
As James was locked in the dark spooky storage he realised there
was a window to escape. He zoomed down the stairs carefully and tried to open
the massive window unfortunately, it was stuck. “Now what am I going to do?”
wondered James. James sat down on the rusty floor and cried. “Aaah!” screamed
James loudly. Suddenly, there was a strange sound. James felt a sudden to
panic!
“Mummy help me,” yelled James. He started to cry and ran around
all of a sudden the old dusty shelf fell on him. James was injured!
Will he die or will he survive?
Mahnoor
Thursday, 26 April 2012
67 Delicious Food
Delicious, mouth watering food!
Write a sentence to describe one of these meals! Use similes, metaphors, personification, adjectives and good phrases to describe!
Best sentences will recive a small prize!
Wednesday, 25 April 2012
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