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Wednesday, 2 April 2014

1 The Monster


Friday 2nd April 2014

THE MONSTER





It was huge, it looked deadly, with crimson red eyes, a black tongue, he looked as if he was 100 tons, he had purple, spiky prickles on his back, it slouches, he is seven foot tall, it has talon like claws and it was hideous! Even worse than Frankenstein! He was just REPULSIVE! His malicious glare traumatised me, it made my heart ROAR! Standing in the derelict alley, it looked like there was no way out. TRAPPED!

To my horror, I realised that the monster got close, very close. My eyes peered up to his gruesome, grotesque face, it felt like my eyes were burning with fear. My legs felt like wobbly jelly, I thought I was going to collapse onto the ground! What shall I do?

There are noises haunting me, shadows circulating me, how will I get out of here? Suddenly the monster lowered to my height and… ROAR! A huge gust of wind wafted passed me, an awful odour came towards my face grew wide. Why did I decide to venture the short way through the alley. The disgusting creature lifted me up, opened its mouth and…………….

1 comment:

  1. Great description. I love that you used a lot of great vocabulary.

    * You have added a lot of description such as crimson blood. That is an adjective.
    * A lot of eclipses for suspense

    Wish: You could add personification for more excitement and even metaphors

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