Eiger: To Write the climax and Resolution to my missing chapter

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Friday, 7 February 2014

2 To Write the climax and Resolution to my missing chapter

"My lungs craved for abit of air. Suddenly, my eyes flickered open although my instinct was to reach the surface. Fragments of wood floating in the water. What happened?.." Billy questioned.

Frantically, his body was waving and kicking the water even though he knew it was hopeless. Just then, his eyes slowly opened, revealing a mysterious land in the far horizon. Bryher. Was it true? Was it his imagination? Abruptly, a torrent of questions came cascading through his mind. Meanwhile, my face flashed in front of his eyes. Why did I leave my home? Why did I leave Bryher? He challenged himself. Rapidly, fierce waves of torture washed over him. Furiously pushing him into his darkest fears. Slowly, the cruel ocean water was pulling him down even though his muscles in his body fought viciously to pull him up to shore, the waves waited to devour him. Abruptly, he tasted the bitter taste of salty water creep down his dry lungs, causing his throat to crack dry. He stopped fighting...Just then, the letter Laura gave suddenly felt like 100 pounds in his pocket. What about Laura? He cried. Spontaneously, boats appeared. Several unfamiliar faces filled his sore red eyes. Hurling abuse to stay alive and keep breathing. Billy was determined not to die at sea, he forced himself to reach Bryher to amend their fathers relationship. What about his family waiting? All of a sudden, he felt a strong hand gripping his shoulder. They plunged him out of the ocean. Like a pair of crooked hands, the vicious lighting ripped open the sky. Who has saved him? Just then, he heard a familiar voice , it was Laura. His sister. Was it true? At that moment, a huge iron grip pumped his body, forcing the water out. Was he alive? Suddenly, his life leaked back into his body, feeding him with strength. Who was it that he owed his life to?

"Sluggishly, my eyes flickered open and revealed the face of Joseph Hannibal, hurling commands to keep my eyes open." Just then, I felt my throat crack dry although tonnes of water passed through. The once amazing Zanzibar stands no more with only bits of disintegrated pieces of word. A wave of relief washed over me. Billy was back home...

Thank God he is back!
Talk to you soon,
Laura...