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Wednesday, 23 April 2014
To my loyal friend Harriet,
I can no longer take these false accusations. Like you said, that malodorous vermin has framed me-no one believes me. I appreciate your time in writing to me; they blamed me for such a callous crime. Me and my family's reputation is tarnished because of that scorny Dumpstone.
Consequently, the demonic plan they concocted had become a success. I am living in isolation and humility is carrying a burden upon my shoulders. Surely you believe me, Harriet? Do you really think that I, your trusted friend, would do something so heinous to one who is so close to me? My integrity has never been questioned before! Do you really want to know the honest truth?
I find it very hard to tell my version of events as the pain is still very raw. Dumbledore had summoned me to the tower top and I followed, heart beating fast. Somehow I felt that someone's eyes were fixed upon me and piercing my skin(it might have been Dumpstone's!) My wand had slipped out so I knelt down to pick it up but then I heard a piercing scream. A vague figure was standing there sniggering with mischief. Dumbledore was gone! As far as I can remember, as soon as I turned, the crowd of shocked people were standing there in utter awe. Wafts of smoke and flames appeared and the looming figure swept away, disappearing into thin air. The event is still engraved in my head and a question is still unanswered... WHERE IS DUMBLEDORE????
From then on, everybody was staring at me, giving me looks that made me feel uncomfortable.
TO BE CONTINUED...
To write a
description of a setting
As the ancient, withered gate creaked open, there was a
sudden eerie silence. Who could it be? Why were they here?
The devouring beast, with claws of silver, ripped open the
sky in sudden anger, as the light flashed as if it was taking a picture, and hung
over the suffocating heat.
The tired, old redbrick chapel stood proudly in the old,
shallow and moist graveyard, as if it was showing that it was the master of the
evils.
The arched windows were walled, as if they were two hands
hiding their eyes, no longer wanting to see daylight.
The hazel white clouds wrapped themselves around the
glistening moon, as the dead trees swayed madly as if they were prisoners
wanting to be free.
The wind blew bitterly as the inky darkness surrounded.
Surreption crept all over.
The unknown figure could feel the fresh, chill anew along
its spine as it stared around and could see the maze of graves and the lofty
path of doom.
What will happen next….?
To write a description of a setting.
Underneath the blanket of dark, ominous clouds, the once
freshly built redbrick chapel stood in the middle of the eerie graveyard,
abandoned. Nestled in its corner, was an old wooden pew with a broken arm. Isolated, the mournful bell-tower stood in the distance eclipsing the skyline,
as the odor of decaying corpses invades the noses off passing pedestrians. In
the distance, vague whispers can be heard from the graves made of chiseled stone. Everything was still until the dark, black and devious looking crow
landed on the sky-scraping bell-tower. The slender oak tree stretched it’s arms
out wide. The fragrance of luscious green grass can be smelt people walk on the cobble
path that swirls through the cracked gravestones.
To write a description of a setting
Stood all alone, the old, ancient redbrick chapel stood
almost demolished as it echoed a wounded sound. The ominous clouds gathered, planning to devour the land. Suddenly, a razor flash of lightning zoomed
across the corner of his eye. Slowly, the door creaked, as the bell tower
mournfully stood as it looked at the land. The thick black smokey clouds were thick, menacing and portentous. The
almost broken grave stones was there, while blood dripped from the
corner of it. As an evil sound was in the distance, the clouds started to
appear gathering together as it started
to rain.
The Monster
Evil crimson eyes stared at me and I froze on the spot, my heart was pounding in my chest. Suddenly, my flash light started flickering and my hand began to tumble. Bravely, I looked back and I saw the savage beast towering over me. Blood was dripping from his mouth and I could hear something crunching in his razor sharp teeth. Could this be me next? I couldn't help thinking about my family. How could I be such a fool to get tricked by so-called friends again!
Wednesday 2nd
April 2014
Write a formal
persuasive letter
South Park
Primary School
Water
Lane
Ilford
IG3 9HF
To whom it
may concern,
As a
hardworking and conscientious student of South Park Primary
School. This letter is regarding the proposal to redevelop
the potential site on Water Lane. We, as citizens of
Redbridge, have many valid reasons for this particular
project,
Most
significantly, surely a person in your position of such high status
should understand that a high proportion of road
accidents involve children (A jaw dropping 70%)
Furthermore,
there has been a sharp increase accidents
involving pedestrians, due to children not having a
play area. (Children playing on their bikes and skateboards.)
Residents of the local community, whole-heartedly
believe converting the wasteland to a park is the utmost
priority! A recent survey has shown 4/5 parents are
not content in leaving their children on their own. 80% is a
far too great a number! How would you feel if your
child was placed in this predicament? In addition,
in the local vicinity there is a lack of outside space for
children (No parks, gardens and the local Schools have
no playing fields) undoubtedly, you don’t want to be
responsible for adding to the increasing rate of childhood
obesity in the UK. Statistics show that we are way ahead
compare to our European counterparts. To tackle this
problematic issue we must find an amicable resolution.
So make the right decision and convert this wasteland to
a park for our community. To support this argument, 60%
of children are continuously playing games and we must
not let children be exploited by excessive video games
and TV.A Park would give the children to burn their weight.
Most importantly, the local Park is a necessity
for all kinds of people. Research shows children perform
better in school if they are fit and healthy. Moreover, a
rising trend of 30% increase in the amount of Overweight
children in the past 5 years. Do you want to be responsible
for all this chaos?
To conclude,
residents are suffering from obesity as they are not fit
and healthy. They sit home all day either watching TV
and eating junk or playing video games.
Please listen to my opinion.
Yours sincerely
Umamah Choudhury
MCCALL’S MIGHTY MISSION ACCLOMPISHED
An emotional Davina McCall broke down into tears as she
completed a mammoth and gruelling 500m epic journey from Edinburgh to London.
Surprisingly, the physically exhausted presenter, stumbled across the finish
line outside the Tate modern art gallery in the capital at 4:30 this afternoon.
This arduous journey was for BT sport relief challenge (to hold women and
children’s hands). As a result of her enduring task, the 46 year old presenter
has raised a staggering £760,000 after running, swimming and cycling 500m
across rough terrain.
.
This monumental and remarkable journey began in Edinburgh
last Saturday and lasted for a torturous 7 days. Astonishingly, Davina declared
“I have never been so tired and physically wounded in my entire life. I have
had aches and pains in my body parts which I never knew existed.” Davina
fatigued and emotionally drenched completed her initial journey from Edinburgh
to Windermere (a 77 mile stretch). A close friend reported, he honestly did not
believe Davina would not complete it after the first stretch of the challenge.
However Davina’s grit, determination and reliance finally paid dividends as she
overcame her phobia of Lake Windermere. She stared to cry and say she was a
coward. In addition Davina commented the bitter ice cold lake was the biggest
barrier of the challenge. Gradually, the courageous presenter dipped her feet
into the ice cold lake and endured an insufferable experience. A despondent
Davina’s lifeless body had to be dragged out of the lake as she completed her
marathon journey.
The duration of this memorable challenge lasted for a
unimaginable7 days. On the final leg of her journey, Davina was accompanied by
Chris Moyles and Greg Whyte. She mustered every ounce of fibre throughout this
challenge. A jubilant exhilarated Davina was welcomed by a crowd of 100s of
people. Draped in a union jack flag, she declared” I am not worthy of this
honour but I feel like an Olympian.” Davina’s elated mother proudly announced
to her circle of friends she was so proud of Davina’s accomplishment. Mathew
(Davina’s husband) and family were happy about Davina’s finish. Most
importantly this remarkable journey raised a substantial amount of money (over
£760,000) and this figure is most likely to raise. Consequently the money
accumulated will help fund thousands of women and children in the world. They
would still like people to donate. Sport relief says please go on the sport
relief website. Davina would like to thank everyone for donating and mostly
friends and family. Especially, Sharon and Rachel (close friends) for donating
and helping her.
Reported by Raiq Alsakkaf
The mysterious churchyard
As the thick, ominous, menacing clouds gathered their army,
the boy’s ears sensed daunting groans and terrifying screams come from further
in the chapel. The stench of decaying corpses filled the thin air. Was this
usual in a haunted churchyard? Crunchy, rustling leaves swirled by gusts of
strong wind, the gates squeaked loudly like a rat, vague whispers echoed in the
distance, fragments of snow white fog circulating him as the trees danced,
surrounding him. A howl entered the background. Suddenly a mysterious figure,
who was wearing long, black boots, slouched behind an old, crumbling grave. He
approached the boy and…………………………
2 The Monster
The atmosphere was suffocating. Wafts of sulphurous flames rapidly engulfed the pale granite ceilings, as the glowing light leaked through the steel doors... Shivering, I recoiled from the compelling monster, the smoke mingling with the agonising burn of the grotesque creature. Cautiously, the vague figure, who's feet softly whispered towards me, cruelly pierced his eyes deep down into mine - his eyes a shocking crimson red... Why did I venture around this tunnel? Why did my curiosity lead me to my death? Why did I have to discover the map? Standing frozen on the ground, I winced at the torrent of thoughts that came cascading through my head, even though, I forced them out. The eerie landscape shall be forever engraved in my mind; the monster's eyes continued to lock with mine. However, my unsteady feet moved back, releasing me from the glare of the creature.
"Let me go!" I screamed frantically, struggling... A blizzard of thoughts wrecked my questions while the monster smiled, devilishly. Consequently, the large looming shadow casting down on me ghosted back. In a blur, the monster sauntered forward to kill me...
"Let me go!" I screamed frantically, struggling... A blizzard of thoughts wrecked my questions while the monster smiled, devilishly. Consequently, the large looming shadow casting down on me ghosted back. In a blur, the monster sauntered forward to kill me...
Volcano poem
The volcano is a motionless
statue.
It make
no sudden movement at all, No
sudden movement at all…
It just gives
a quick wink then it’s off.
Sshh, did you hear that?!
Rumble, crumble! Oh
no, it’s started and bubbling like a bowl of hot soup. The volcano
gives a vicious scream!
Crumble! CRASH!!!
Gallons of heart-stopping
lava leaps out of it’s one and only home.
Its hazardous magma dances through the streets,
leaving thousands of deafening screams behind.
The eruption is a furious
bull,
devouring the immense city as it pursues innocent lives.
Rapidly, villagers race to
find their precious shelters.
You’re begging
to cascade form this suffocating place,
nowhere to hide. Please
stop, PLEASE STOP!!
The
sweltering magma gives a blinding shine.
Spouting its venomous
poison out,
like
a cunning serpent,
It sprints past the
world.
Cartwheeling its enemies away,
it
leaves the world to a horrific doom….
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