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Wednesday 2 April 2014


Wednesday 2nd April 2014

 

                         Venomous volcano 

 

The dormant volcano relaxes gazing at the green scenery,

Standing proud as a valiant soldier,

As tall as a sky scraper,

Towering high,

Citizens surround the almighty volcano,

That touches the serene sky,

And twinkles in the shimmering sunlight.

 

Through the tranquil island,

The immense volcano attracts to you its beauty,

And dominates the land,

Unexpectedly,

The ground shakes,

The leaves unhook themselves,

And the volcano quakes,

The silence grew,

No wind flew,

RUMBLE RUMBLE!!!!

 

 

 

The deceptive volcano was on to them,

An unpredictable of lava erupted like a firework display,

Spouting venomous poison,

Lava gushing out of the cracks in the concrete,

Citizens evacuate,

An eruption was occurring,

Destruction was made in all of the directions,

And no hope of protection…

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

1 comment:

  1. I I really like the way you have used really good adjectives such as the dormant volcano and I also like the way you have used some very good similes such as as tall as a sky scraper.

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