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Wednesday 2 April 2014

To whom it may concern,

I am a local pupil residing near Water Lane and I am writing to you on behalf of South Park Primary School, regarding the renovation of the wasteland. It takes a considerate and knowledgeable man, as yourself,  to take such a vast step to take my opinion. A man who lives up to your cavalier and withholds such a high position of authority, should perceive the benefits of reconstructing the barren land to become a local park.


First and foremost, numerous accidents occur with children, as recent statistics show that there has been a major increase of seventy per cent in road car accidents. I believe that this is a non-negotiable decision, as a park is crucial for the community as the closest local park is approximately 10 miles away, where will the youth socialise? Or stimulate their minds from their hectic schedule? Most significantly, I have surveyed 50 parents and 95% of them agreed, that it is unsafe for children to frolic unsupervised and have also mentioned constructing a park with plain fields. The welfare of the youth depends on your decision.


Moreover, there is lack of exercise, as there has been 40% increase in obesity in children and due to the fact that there is no garden either as we dwell in high rise flats. England is way ahead in obesity compared to our European neighbours ( 35% increase). 60% of children spend invaluable time on gaming consoles when it is perfect to spend it in a peaceful area. In my experience , I think that the majority of residents would prefer a park. We are very unfortunate and need an immediate construction, we need a place to socialise.


If you have any issues with constructing this 24 acre field, then please note that we are helpless children with no place to show our social skills. A rising trend of 30% increase of overweight children over the age of 5 has increased. Physical education is a huge part of the government curriculum, and a nearby park will increase the amount of exercise they do. Burning calories is essential as being weighty has several disadvantages, it is going to be advantageous and if you approve, without dispute, it will help generations to come. As you are aware, the youth club fees are beyond the payable price for our underpaid parents. Our school would desire a safe, calm and amusing area which would shed some light on this problematic situation.


I hope you take this letter into consideration as it has been a strainous task to get the approval of the residents living in my locality. I hope you understand that this is a necessity and it is absolutely essential of the construction to occur and that it could save lives or it will be mundane, boring , and very uninteresting.

Yours faithfully,
          Abhinov Dey

1 comment:

  1. What??????? Is this truly your piece!!! Amazing!!! I cannot believe you wrote this

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