Friday 2nd April 2014
THE MONSTER
It was huge, it looked deadly, with crimson red
eyes, a black tongue, he looked as if he was 100 tons, he had purple, spiky
prickles on his back, it slouches, he is seven foot tall, it has talon like claws
and it was hideous! Even worse than Frankenstein! He was just REPULSIVE! His
malicious glare traumatised me, it made my heart ROAR! Standing in the derelict
alley, it looked like there was no way out. TRAPPED!
To my horror, I realised that the monster got
close, very close. My eyes peered up to his gruesome, grotesque face, it felt
like my eyes were burning with fear. My legs felt like wobbly jelly, I thought
I was going to collapse onto the ground! What shall I do?
There are noises haunting me, shadows circulating
me, how will I get out of here? Suddenly the monster lowered to my height and…
ROAR! A huge gust of wind wafted passed me, an awful odour came towards my face
grew wide. Why did I decide to venture the short way through the alley. The
disgusting creature lifted me up, opened its mouth and…………….
Great description. I love that you used a lot of great vocabulary.
ReplyDelete* You have added a lot of description such as crimson blood. That is an adjective.
* A lot of eclipses for suspense
Wish: You could add personification for more excitement and even metaphors