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Wednesday 26 February 2014

Scene 5-The great gang chase

(Shane enters a derelict alleyway, singing happily as he passed by)

(Adolescent gang loitering and vandalising people’s property)

Grover: (Angrily) Hurry up man! One more capture, and we're done for. Remember last week? Don’t make me talk about that again.
Rocky: (Mockingly and aversively) SHUT UP and chill out mate, take a cigarette and a drink like Roylls here. Besides, I’m the boss so HOW DARE YOU SPEAK LIKE THAT TO ME!!!
Roylls: (Drunken and cheerfully) Yeah brov, me, totally awesome. I should be second, not you, you’re an idiot.

(Gang starts singing their anthem)

(Shane suddenly stumbles across the gang)

Shane: (Quietly) OH NO! See those there, they hate me. Act cool. Come on whisketts, let’s run before they pursue us. Last time was terror.

(Feeling terrified, Shane shields his new cat. However, the gang spots him. Both eyes fix on each other)

Rocky: OY! Stop singing. I see him. That clown Shane. His the reason we were in jail. We’re gonna get him this time.
Shane:  LET’S RUN!!!

(Shane rapidly runs, passing a group of cars which horns at him madly. He takes a piece of wire and rips a piece of his favorite jacket)

(Gang gets mislead and loses track of Shane, starts breathing heavily)

Whole gang: That stupid boys off again. Next time his breakfast!

Grover and Roylls: WERE THE DEADLY VIPERS! FOREVER!!!

Rocky: OY! You animals. THAT WAS MY LINE! PLUS YOU ADDED FOREVER!

(Shane checks his jacket for his cat)

Shane: Thanks goodness, Spitfire, you got me worried. Anyways, that don’t worry, you’re alive!

(Cat meows)

Shane: Let’s go home! I promise there will be no more trouble.


(Shane walks home)

Written by Raiq Alsakkaf

1 comment:

  1. Really Amazing!!!! :) A truly good piece!!!

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